Please help me out Vol fans!

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Neylan Bright

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My name is Neylan R. Bright, I have been a vol fan for my whole life... My dad has the whole downstairs...not just one room decked out in Orange and White! the bathroom downstairs is also orange and white and the toilet has stickers of other SEC teams in it, and my dad's van sings rocky top for the horn...anyways I've always been a big UT fan! PLEASE oh PLEASE show a Vol fan just like you guys, some love! I am a filmmaker and my film was accepted into a video contest called the "My Rode Reel 2014" contest. This link will bring you to my Short film I made with my friends! Can you guys please vote for it? In one week I went from last place to 12th place! I still can't believe I broke into the Top 25! But I am soooo close to winning this thing and bringing home a film award to a city that's not really known for film! Come on VFL's please help a Vol fan out! Thanks, Enjoy & God Bless!
link: My RØDE Reel -SURViVE (Short Film): My RØDE Reel 2014
 
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7thgroupvolfan, NO WAY MAN! You really think I would make up all that stuff! PLEASE i really need some help . Vol fan to Vol fan, please it will take less than 2 minutes! PLEASE!
 
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Maybe if you had asked for prayers you would have elicited a better response.
 
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Ok I'll offer up a legit critique. I'm not trying to be snarky or insulting, these were just some things I noticed as I watched it. Please take it as constructive criticism.

I understand you were on a limited budget so I'm going to cut you slack on the bad acting and the majority of the FX. (The run over head was impressive considering)

You had a decent little story to tell but there are a few things you could have done to tighten up the finished profducy.

1) It was about 4-5 minutes too long. Could definitely use an editorial trim. There was a scene in the kitchen that droned on. Some of it could have been the acting but considering your limitations in that area the scene needed to be cut short. Or more camera angles might have helped.

2) The whole scene where the girl was telling the guy how she couldn't trust him while he was outside car and the zombies where banging on her window was silly. Why did they not try to go around the car and get him? There was little to no sense of urgency that he needed to get in the car. While the dialog was important to the overall story, there wasn't much tension for his safety. Plus you had already let us know that he would survive with the opening flash forward.

3) Eliminate cheap scares like the zombie appearing out of nowhere right next to the girl after an establisheing shot that showed no one around. On top of that, the Z must have just bit her once then went on its way. Perhaps it should have been more of a struggle with her killing the zombie after being bit. That would go a ways to explaining why she was left mostly intact when the dude showed back up again.

If you where an undergrad film student I would give you a solid B. The effort was there but you have several areas to hone your craft.

If you were a Graduate student I would expect more and give you a C at best.
 
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burntorangeVOLffle said:
Ok I'll offer up a legit critique. I'm not trying to be snarky or insulting, these were just some things I noticed as I watched it. Please take it as constructive criticism.

I understand you were on a limited budget so I'm going to cut you slack on the bad acting and the majority of the FX. (The run over head was impressive considering)

You had a decent little story to tell but there are a few things you could have done to tighten up the finished profducy.

1) It was about 4-5 minutes too long. Could definitely use an editorial trim. There was a scene in the kitchen that droned on. Some of it could have been the acting but considering your limitations in that area the scene needed to be cut short. Or more camera angles might have helped.

2) The whole scene where the girl was telling the guy how she couldn't trust him while he was outside car and the zombies where banging on her window was silly. Why did they not try to go around the car and get him? There was little to no sense of urgency that he needed to get in the car. While the dialog was important to the overall story, there wasn't much tension for his safety. Plus you had already let us know that he would survive with the opening flash forward.

3) Eliminate cheap scares like the zombie appearing out of nowhere right next to the girl after an establisheing shot that showed no one around. On top of that, the Z must have just bit her once then went on its way. Perhaps it should have been more of a struggle with her killing the zombie after being bit. That would go a ways to explaining why she was left mostly intact when the dude showed back up again.

If you where an undergrad film student I would give you a solid B. The effort was there but you have several areas to hone your craft.

If you were a Graduate student I would expect more and give you a C at best.
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Yes I am a graduate but everyone learns something new each day and continues to learn when they are doing something they are passionate about. I can understand criticism on my actor's acting and that the length of my film was too long But i have heard nothing negative about the VFX until you. But thanks for you feed back.
 
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