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#4
#4
The articles were great. You actually CAN spell and punctuate!!

:clap:

I couldn't believe that comment, though.

:lol:
 
#5
#5
I'm impressed . . . I'm so used to seeing you post in short bursts, I didn't know what to do when I saw a complete thought. ;) A couple of those paragraphs ran on a little bit, but other than that it read very well.

Good job. It takes guts to post something like that and open yourself up to criticism. :thumbsup:
 
#6
#6
i really want it to be my career so any criticism is good... and thx guys your input means alot to me... thank u for the support...
 
#7
#7
it just got uploaded today and this is my 1st published work... i was kinda nervous about it coming up online...
 
#11
#11
You can stop being nervous . . . It sounds well thought out and is well written. :clap:

 
#13
#13
hahaha i think i will... its just kinda weird to think that ppl all around the world can read my articles...
 
#14
#14
I really enjoyed reading those articles. I also liked the whole survey thing. Congrats on getting them published!!
 
#18
#18
Alright, here is my opinion.

As far as the March Madness article...

It was good, but it felt like it was confused between a description of the tournament itself, and its importance in American society. So either change the first and last paragraphs to being about the happenings of the tourney, or change the body to a look at the meaning of March Madness in American society.

And the steroids article...

The content was good, but the delivery felt somewhat childish. Maybe you were aiming for this, I don't know, but I'd just consider revising how you worded most of that article in accordance to how professional you want the article to be. Also, the poll seems a bit odd, as it only surveys the opinion of three people. I'd say pick it apart, shorten it, and turn it into a Q&A.

And this part...

*In a recent national survey of steroid use, 3.5 percent of high school seniors responding reported they have used steroids at least once, up from 2.1 percent in 1991.*

It would probably be best incorporated into the article.

All criticism aside, you've got yourself some good talent there, man. Keep working on your craft.
 
#19
#19
thanks for the heads up milo... the poll was written by the married couple in my class... tards... the editor wants me to aim 4 my opinion on evrything...
 
#20
#20
"it drew more"

Choose another word.

I am very nit-picky about word usage.

Was a Journalism Major ;)
 
#21
#21
U-T u are the perfect man to help me hone my skills... i have a new mentor... i hope to sumday write for si...
 
#22
#22
Originally posted by toddbond007@Apr 16, 2005 12:03 AM
... the poll was written by the married couple in my class... tards...
Click to expand...

:lolup:

I think I know who you're talking about. I saw their bios. My condolences to you for having to share classroom space with them.
 
#25
#25
BTW, not laughing at your thoughts of writing for them but spelling sumday
 
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